This is my story, I always enjoy writing about mysterious things, houses are easy to describe with much detail and create an interesting story, so I went for it. It takes place in my neighborhood, although this story did not actually happen. My story is not long but I did have fun writing it, I totally changed the point of view from my first story, I hope it’s more interesting and has better character description and stuff now. My title is not very creative, and I don't feel as though my ending is very strong either. What do you think of my title, characters, and ending? Let me know, I'd love the feedback.
The House Next Door
The House Next Door
The house next door was always a mystery. One day Sally and her friend Rich decided to go check it out. Sally was not such a brave soul but she was still young and loved to investigate. Rich on the other hand, loved to be around Sally, he was very brave and was risky as well. They walked by the house each and every day when they took their walk around the neighborhood but there has never been an ounce of sound or sight that has come out of it. Sally was too scared to go in it, but they both wanted to find out the situation so one day they decided that they may face their fears and barge in. Is that a good idea? Or is that rude? Is there anyone in there? Because if there is, that is going to be very awkward, and probably a tad bit scary. They still had no idea what to do. Rich is staying at Sally's house tonight, overnight, so they are going to talk it out then. They wondered if there is anything valuable in there. Lots of questions are running through their heads as they decide what they are going to do with the mysterious, still house. It has always been a mystery running through everyone’s heads that live nearby.
Well, Sally and Rich had the sleepover last night together, and they talked it out. The situation is still undecided and Sally still does not have the guts to search the house, as much as they want to, especially Rich. They got up though in the middle of the night and took a walk in the dark, that scared them enough, that is why it was decided trying to investigate the house overnight was just not going to work out. But you wouldn’t believe what happened, as they walked by this time, they heard the sound of a coyote howling in the backyard. They thought they had an idea of that being a sign of something related to the house but were not sure. This house grows older day after day, they wondered if one day it’s just going to fall down. They hoped not because before that happens they were definitely getting in there to see it.
Well, they walked by the house again today and walked a little closer to it, and viewed little details about it to see what the outside was like. It looked as though it was made about fifty years ago, the sides of the house were made out of wood, the wood was blackened as though a fire may have gone down in the house one day. They were surprised that the house was still standing if that was the case. The roof had old wooden boards over it assuming the shingles that were on it were old and broken up. The door was the color black, and it had cob webs all over it, and the window looked like it had been cracked a little somehow. Sally was still to chicken to go inside, they wondered if the door was even unlocked because they didn't want to have to break down the door to get in. So they walked home and ate some pizza and began to discuss the situation. All they were told when they asked who lived at the house, was that an old lady used to live there years ago but nobody knew if anyone had moved in there since.
But the night time came around again and they were together once again, it started to get more frequent, relationship wise, and they took another walk outside during the night because if Sally's mom found out, she wouldn't be happy, she didn't want them anywhere near that house, so they had to sneak out. They walked about a minute down the road and approached the house again. They finally decided to face their fears and discover the situation that no one else will find out for them. They walked up to the house, locked arms because Sally was terrified and went up to the door. It was very dark in the house. Rich grabbed the doorknob and started to turn it as slow as he could, the door was unlocked and they opened it very slowly and stepped in. The door creaked very loud when it was opened. They hoped nobody had heard it. He left the door open because if something happened or they got too scared, they wanted to just be able to run out. They started to look around but since it was dark they could not see anything. The first thing they noticed was the rusty, disgusting smell of a rotted out house.
Sally then realized the only way they were going to be able to get around the house was with a flashlight. Rich brought a bag over but he was not sure if the flashlight got put in the bag or was left on the charger at home, sure enough Sally felt around the bag and it was there. She said the words thank god and turned it on and could not believe what they had seen. The house had many empty rooms in it and was very large. All the appliances looked as though they were made many, many years ago and had been used to death for ever. Everywhere they stepped they were walking around on dirt and dust and cob webs and spiders were even all over. Good thing they did not have a fear of nasty things. But they both wanted to just keep searching. They walked down the hallway downstairs and nothing impressed them but a run-down house. They both turned back and something white walked from room to room. Oh my god, Sally's heart started to race, they asked each other if either of them had seen what just went by and they both noticed something. They ran down the hallway to the room the creature entered. Rich flashed the flashlight in there and did not notice anything out of the ordinary. Does this house have ghosts living it, they looked at each other and questioned. "Maybe," Rich said. Well that was scary but they wanted to keep investigating. They realized that there were a set of stairs next to the door when they had walked in and so they figured they should go check them out, so they did. They started walking up them and the floor boards creaked and they just hoped they were not going to break on them. They got to the top and there was just one small bedroom with a closet in it up there. They entered into the bed room; there was a disgusting bed with no sheets or anything on it with a mouse running around on top of it, so gross. The closet door was closed, Rich opened it, and Sally screamed so loud.
Well, Sally and Rich had the sleepover last night together, and they talked it out. The situation is still undecided and Sally still does not have the guts to search the house, as much as they want to, especially Rich. They got up though in the middle of the night and took a walk in the dark, that scared them enough, that is why it was decided trying to investigate the house overnight was just not going to work out. But you wouldn’t believe what happened, as they walked by this time, they heard the sound of a coyote howling in the backyard. They thought they had an idea of that being a sign of something related to the house but were not sure. This house grows older day after day, they wondered if one day it’s just going to fall down. They hoped not because before that happens they were definitely getting in there to see it.
Well, they walked by the house again today and walked a little closer to it, and viewed little details about it to see what the outside was like. It looked as though it was made about fifty years ago, the sides of the house were made out of wood, the wood was blackened as though a fire may have gone down in the house one day. They were surprised that the house was still standing if that was the case. The roof had old wooden boards over it assuming the shingles that were on it were old and broken up. The door was the color black, and it had cob webs all over it, and the window looked like it had been cracked a little somehow. Sally was still to chicken to go inside, they wondered if the door was even unlocked because they didn't want to have to break down the door to get in. So they walked home and ate some pizza and began to discuss the situation. All they were told when they asked who lived at the house, was that an old lady used to live there years ago but nobody knew if anyone had moved in there since.
But the night time came around again and they were together once again, it started to get more frequent, relationship wise, and they took another walk outside during the night because if Sally's mom found out, she wouldn't be happy, she didn't want them anywhere near that house, so they had to sneak out. They walked about a minute down the road and approached the house again. They finally decided to face their fears and discover the situation that no one else will find out for them. They walked up to the house, locked arms because Sally was terrified and went up to the door. It was very dark in the house. Rich grabbed the doorknob and started to turn it as slow as he could, the door was unlocked and they opened it very slowly and stepped in. The door creaked very loud when it was opened. They hoped nobody had heard it. He left the door open because if something happened or they got too scared, they wanted to just be able to run out. They started to look around but since it was dark they could not see anything. The first thing they noticed was the rusty, disgusting smell of a rotted out house.
Sally then realized the only way they were going to be able to get around the house was with a flashlight. Rich brought a bag over but he was not sure if the flashlight got put in the bag or was left on the charger at home, sure enough Sally felt around the bag and it was there. She said the words thank god and turned it on and could not believe what they had seen. The house had many empty rooms in it and was very large. All the appliances looked as though they were made many, many years ago and had been used to death for ever. Everywhere they stepped they were walking around on dirt and dust and cob webs and spiders were even all over. Good thing they did not have a fear of nasty things. But they both wanted to just keep searching. They walked down the hallway downstairs and nothing impressed them but a run-down house. They both turned back and something white walked from room to room. Oh my god, Sally's heart started to race, they asked each other if either of them had seen what just went by and they both noticed something. They ran down the hallway to the room the creature entered. Rich flashed the flashlight in there and did not notice anything out of the ordinary. Does this house have ghosts living it, they looked at each other and questioned. "Maybe," Rich said. Well that was scary but they wanted to keep investigating. They realized that there were a set of stairs next to the door when they had walked in and so they figured they should go check them out, so they did. They started walking up them and the floor boards creaked and they just hoped they were not going to break on them. They got to the top and there was just one small bedroom with a closet in it up there. They entered into the bed room; there was a disgusting bed with no sheets or anything on it with a mouse running around on top of it, so gross. The closet door was closed, Rich opened it, and Sally screamed so loud.
You would not believe what was seen.
THE LADY LYING DEAD IN THE CLOSET.
How did she get there you ask?
They wish they knew.
That was an investigation for another day.
THE LADY LYING DEAD IN THE CLOSET.
How did she get there you ask?
They wish they knew.
That was an investigation for another day.
